Mattias & Jayne – Part Two!

As promised, here is the second half of my Mattias/Jayne interaction. I hope you like it and if there are things that you notice could be better, awesome! It’s good to write and practice on your own, but it can be helpful to see/analyze the good and bad in other peoples’ writing as well. Take a minute to see what sounded natural in the story and what didn’t. Why did those parts stand out to you? Remember, nothing is bad. It’s just a work in progress! Hopefully some of this helps/helped you somewhat. Now, before I type your ears off (that’s a weird phrase, but go with it) here’s my ink, nice and fresh:


The damn librarian was eyeing me again. She hated when I came in here and always found some reason to try and kick me out. Well that was not happening today. I’d kick up a fuss if she tried anything nasty today and she’d have to back down. I was so focused on her, I didn’t realize that some twerp was trying to talk to me. He looked like he had barely hit puberty and he was freakishly gangly. I rolled my eyes and turned up the volume on my headphones and tuned him out. I’d been playing Solitaire on the computer for maybe 3 minutes before he tried to get my attention again. He was persistent and I wanted to tell him off, but that would send the librarian swooping down. I didn’t need the hassle, so I cocked one headphone off my ear and gave him my best ‘what the hell do you want?’ face. He didn’t seem to notice and immediately launched into some long drawn out story. Halfway through I put my headphones back on and went back to my game. Thankfully, he got the hint that time and I was left in peace for the next few hours.

When he got up to leave, he turned to wave at me like we were friends or something. I just stared until he walked away. Some people really couldn’t help sticking their noses into other people’s business. It wasn’t like I was wearing a sign saying ‘Come talk to me!’ or anything. Damn. I felt a tap on my shoulder and whipped around. The kid was there again and took a step back out of surprise. Could he really not take a hint??

“What the hell do you want? I’m trying to mind my own business and you can’t stop bugging me for five minutes!” Even though I was getting aggressive, he didn’t bat an eye.

“In class today, we learned about the warning signs of depression and loneliness and you seemed like you showed a bunch of them, so I wanted to make sure you were okay. Lashing out is common,” he stated confidently. He was so proper, it was like he was reading out of a flipping textbook.

“Yeah, no. I’m not any of that crap. You did your good deed for the day; you get a gold star. Now, if you could be so kind as to go away, that’d be great.” He wouldn’t stop smiling and it was really starting to get on my nerves. He hadn’t budged, so I got out of my chair and loomed over him as best I could. “Look, I don’t know what else I can say, but you’re seriously starting to piss me off. Shove off before I make you,” I threatened. He needed to know I was serious. I wasn’t planning on shoving some kid who was half my age just because he was annoying, but it was tempting.

“How about you just tell me something that’s bothering you and we can talk through it?”

“Okay, fine. I’m frustrated by people who can’t stop pestering strangers and asking stupid questions. There was this one time, I was at the library and some kid wouldn’t leave me alone for hours and they never found his body. The end,” I finished pointedly. I could tell that he was getting uncomfortable, but he just sat there.

“That was a strange story. I don’t think you’re going to murder me though, so I’m not worried. You’re deflecting. That’s when someone avoids serious stuff by not being serious and changing the topic or avoiding questions.”

“Great. Awesome. You caught me. I guess I’ll deflect somewhere else now.” Before he could comment, I grabbed my bag off the floor and headed out toward the front of the library. It wasn’t worth it to get in a fight with some kid who wanted to play therapist. When I got outside, I realized it had started raining. There hadn’t been any news about rain, but that wasn’t surprising. The weather here majorly sucked. I sighed, thinking about if it would be better inside than out here, dealing with the rain. I heard someone behind me, clearing their throat. Even without turning, I knew who it was. He was holding out a small, folded up, yellow umbrella.

“I had an extra one in my bag. You never know, right?” He asked. The ridiculous grin was back and my desire to smack his face was also back. I grabbed it anyway. He was going to be annoying until I took it and I didn’t want to get soaked. Kids could be ridiculous sometimes….


And there you have it! Prompt – complete. Story time dance moves? Probably not, but we all know that I’ve got the moves. You don’t get to see them though, because this is not a vlog, but you can imagine it and that’s good enough right?

For the story, I wanted to write from both perspectives in depth, but I spent way too much time working out Jayne’s character development and didn’t develop Mattias as much as I could have. Jayne didn’t come naturally to me, so I kept writing from his side, hoping to get a good flow going. I think it turned out better than expected! Feel free to comment, critique, and ask questions. My next content post will be on Thursday for the weekend’s assignment, but I might try and sneak something in on Wednesday too.

If you guys did your stories, feel free to message me the answers to your questions or your interactions – I’d be happy to read them. For now, I’m off! See you Wednesday and/or Thursday!

It’s Thursday! Time for a Prompt!

Hello companions! I hope your week is wrapping up nicely and you’ve been feeling productive. If it makes you feel better about your various levels of productivity, I’ve had an iffy week – I just couldn’t get up the energy for a ‘gung ho kick butt’ kind of week. It’s important not to let that kind of stuff get you down and I have to remind myself of that fairly often. That aside, I want to introduce my next writing activity to you! I will be doing mine tomorrow or Saturday and WILL be posting it on Sunday. I’d say drumroll please, but who just carries around a big drum set just for this kind of setup? Now… I’ll have you know that joke was funnier in my head and after typing it, I cringed. However, we’re all friends here so I’m gonna leave it there for you to enjoy (you’re welcome). Moving right along to the rules!

  • Pick a random name [I used https://www.behindthename.com/random/ so shout out to them for being the first Google result. I went with first name only, but if you want to get full name-y, be my guest] – For me, it was Mattias.
  • Pick three adjectives [ https://www.randomlists.com/random-adjectives is my google result – set the quantity to 3 instead of 12] – For me, they were light, resonant, and charming.
  • Thus far, I have created an individual named Mattias who is light, resonant, and charming (whatever that means). I’ve chosen to make this person male, but you can decide on their gender or nongender or even species if you enjoy animal or alien typed fantasy stories. (nudge, nudge – the point is to have fun, don’t forget!)
  • Ask this character these three (I was going to randomly generate those too, but I think you guys need a constant) questions:
    • What do you like to do on a rainy day?
    • What is one weird or quirky thing about you?
    • Pick one event that shaped your life heavily; what was it?
  • Make sure that each answer is at least a couple sentences. That is the brunt of the prompt. It seems simple at first, but you really need to try to understand the perspective of the person you are writing rather than your own. I know we often write from what we know, but it’s good to try and shift into other pairs of shoes. When answering these questions, answer them from the perspective of the character and try not to influence them from your own personal life as much as possible. This is their backstory we’re creating.
  • You can leave it there and pat yourself on the back for a job well done and I will be so happy and proud of you guys and I’d love to read some of your characters! ORRRRRRRR
  • You could play on hard mode and do it twice……. Having your characters meet in/at [INSERT YOUR CHOICE OF LOCATION HERE]. Write a one-page interaction between those two characters. This is harder since you have to be two separate people at the same time. You might already know how the conversation or interaction is going to go, but you can’t lead your characters too heavily. They have to be able to fall into a natural rhythm of their own. That doesn’t mean they have to be charming or get along – they can be awkward, angry, or just plain rude – but they shouldn’t be forced into a one-dimensional rapport just because it would be easy to do!

Now, I picked my first character in the course of explaining the instructions and I’m going to now pick a second one (I typed that and then went and made my selections hence the present tense): Jayne – unequal, harsh, homeless. I will be writing my answers to those three questions for both characters as well as a page-long interaction between them and I will post those on Sunday. This gives any of you fancy-pants readers out there a chance to do the same. Once again, feel free to comment or ask questions or message me with your submission. See you Sunday!